Wattpad Book Reviews

The book, Crimson, is a Mystery/Thriller story written by allycatdaone15. We're thrust into the Victorian era, following Allyson Kaye as she runs the Kaye family's business. She is joined by 'loyal' servants Amon, the butler/bodyguard, and the Monde siblings. She has found out that someone is stealing from her family and she sets out to find out who. Meanwhile, her parents are plotting behind her back -- with something her servants think might help them out.

Our main protagonist is Allyson Kaye, the heiress to the Kaye fortune. She is young but she is extremely cruel. If things are not done her way on her time, she will dish out punishments. If things are done that she specifically said not to do, the punishment would be unspeakable. She leads with an iron fist -- a somewhat anti-social one as well. She never leaves her house and she expects her servants to follow in her footsteps. In the summary, Kaye is descripted as 'perfect' -- beauty, wealth, smarts -- though that 'perfection' is her major flaw. She does not like change and she does not like insubordinates. Her servants are not human to her, just playthings to amuse her whenever she is bored. She is sadistic, as shown when she takes pleasure in torturing her servants -- and the fact the room she dishes out her punishments in is called her playroom. I hate her. 

Our other main characters are Amon and the Monde siblings. The Monde siblings -- it is not clear on how old they are or how long they had been working for Kaye. Nor are we sure how they ended up with her. There is Lyon and Lynette, the oldest twins who are the cook and a maid respectively; Lydia, the loyalist who is a maid; and Lyria, the youngest maid. Amon was hired by Kaye's parents to be her bodyguard, though I am not entirely sure if Kaye knows it.

I enjoyed the language of this book. Everything was descriptive and flowed well. It had me fully immersed to the point I didn't even want to stop reading! As it stands, there is a lot of vagueness in the story that causes some confusion but this is only the beginning of the story and I expect most of the confusion to be cleared up in later chapters (mostly dealing with the Mondes and Amon).

(Rating ⭐️/5)

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Already, I'm hooked on this story. The character have their own flares of personality that clash well and not so well, which makes the entire book something interesting to read. I've never read anything like this book before and that new book flavor is like a flame and I, a moth.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The flow of the story is very well maintained. I don't feel like it was rushed, the tone and language of the story is immersive. Your usage of descriptive language really made it easy to see and feel the characters rather than it feeling like I was reading about them. There was some confusion that interrupted the flow, mostly concerning Amon and Lydia, but that, I'm sure, will be cleared up in later chapters.

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Does it move me? Yes. I've never felt so much animosity for a fictional character until this book. This is not a bad thing at all. I was so immersed into the story, I wanted to gut Allyson like a pig and kick Lydia in the arse. There was some confusion but it will probably be remedied later on in the story (concerning the Monde siblings).

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

 There was only some errors with wordiness and comma usage but nothing  at all distracting. Word choice was exquisite but sometimes how sentences were structured was a little bit weird and confusing. I liked how I actually felt like I was in the story during this time period.

Cover ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

The cover is simple. It can be assumed the person in the cover is the main character, Allyson. We can assume a lot from just her expression alone of the cover. The slight narrow of her eyes and the smug smirk, we get the picture that she may look innocent but there is something far more diabolical behind those glowing red orbs. Something that actually reigns true.

Summary ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

I liked the summary. I came into the story knowing a little bit about what I was going to read. There was some confusion, however. How the last passage was worded and with the punctuations, it was a little hard to really discern what I was reading. Other than that, the summary was well written.

Overall ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️/5

The book, The Gifted, is a Science Fiction story written by obsessive_bookwcrm. The book follows two unalike young ladies as they struggle with the hardships of a test that defines their future quality of life. The story is told from the perspective of Elayne and Rel, two girls from completely different backgrounds. Rel is an orphan who grew up on the streets with partners in crime Sage and Asher. Elayne lives with her loving mother and father. Both girls live in Sector 13 and both girls have their lives changed drastically when going to take the Examination. 

One of the main protagonist is Elayne. She is described as an 'ordinary' girl. She goes to school, she follows the rules, and she's worried about the Examination like everyone else her age. It is at the Examination that she finds out she's not the ordinary girl she thought she was. She is a special kind of person called "Gifted" who have extraordinary abilities that are rare to be born with. Even more rare is that bother her parents are not gifted -- which having a gifted child to two ungifted parents was thought to be impossible. Elayne is a relatable character with real life flaws. She has a happy balance of wit and naivety with a dash of angst -- as expected from a teen her age.

The other protagonist is Rel, who is essentially the very opposite of Elayne. She doesn't have parents, she doesn't have a home, she didn't go to school, and she doesn't follow the rules. She was orphaned at age five and had been on the streets since she ran away from the orphanage. She is described as a hardy and resourceful young lady who isn't afraid to break the rules to survive -- even going as far as putting the lives of others in danger (though most of it seems to be subconscious). Unlike Elayne, Rel knew about her special abilities since she was a young age. Even knowing about it, she has yet to be able to control it.

I like how this book has two different storylines -- a third if the prologue is anything to go by -- that will eventually merge into one. We're shown two different girls who are extremely different -- even their elements are opposite -- that will be eventually herded into the same place: Academy. There is not much I can conclude because it being so early on in the story, but I cannot wait to actually read more of this book. The characters are well written and thought out, the world is revealed to us slowly instead of us being smacked in the face with history lessons in one whole go. The history of the world is gradually spread out in mini lessons through the dialogue of the characters or the thoughts of Elayne or Rel.

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The concept of the story has a small taste of Divergent but is completely different. It spins the tale of two girls struggling to overcome the hand they've been dealt by - - not life -- but the authority of the sector they live in.

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The flow of the story is very well maintained. Even though every chapter flip-flops between the two characters, one can still keep up with the events that are happening around us. I can picture this world and can feel what every character shown is going through -- even the characters who aren't really given a face, I can imagine what they're going through.

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Does it move me? Yes. I felt like I was in this story. I felt the character's emotions instead of me just reading it. I saw the characters instead of me just reading. The world is interesting and the way the story is structured keeps me in the moment - -keeps me wanting to read. I  went into this story expecting an interesting sci-fi piece of work and I was not disappointed at all. 

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

There were little to no grammatical errors that jumped out at me. There was nothing distracting about word choice or sentence structure at all. There were a few places that could use work and then there were the mistakes with the commas-- but nothing that was like a red marker on a test. 

Cover ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

At first, I was confused by the cover. I liked the design but I didn't really understand what the flames were for. When I read the story, I pieced it together. Blue and Red, Water and Fire. Rel and Elayne. It makes perfect sense and it compliments the book so well. I also like the fact you've included the main part of the summary on the cover. Gives a reader a look at the book before they look at the book, if you catch my drift. 

Summary ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The summary puts us in the world before we even open the book. We know where we are, we know when we are, we know why we're there. It also gives us a peek in the lives of our two main characters and is a partial source of their background. We go into the story already knowing a little bit about Elayne and Rel before we even meet them.

Overall ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️/5

The book, The Ghost of Him, is a Teen Fiction written by loveinsolitude. The story is written in first person and follows a young lady named Sienna who chases an obsession. Her obsession is a person she's only seen once in passing and has never been formally introduced to before. Sienna is a senior in high school; a picture perfect student, daughter, and friend who is known by all. Caleb, on the other hand, is the complete opposite of her and no one really knows much about him.

The story is written in Sienna's point of view.  Based off the summary alone, I do not like Sienna. Her description is the epitome of a Mary-Su -- or a character that is perfection with no real-world flaws. She isn't really that relatable until we're introduced to her obsession, Caleb. This is where my dislike for her begins to grow. She is hypocritical. She keeps calling Caleb a jerk even though she keeps getting in his face after being told she was bothering him. Her reaction to him telling her off is to cry and then try again later. My dislike for her personality made it difficult to continue reading. She claims that she wants to give him everything and get nothing in return, however, she inadvertently demands his affection and attention.

Caleb, on the other hand, is completely oblivious to her obsession, even though everyone else around him can see it, save Juliet. I'd have to agree with Leslie on the rest of the 'friends' in the circle. They do seem to be loyal to a tooth to Sienna. To the point where they nearly shunned Juliet and Caleb in the lunchroom after their revelation. All over something the two couldn't control and something Sienna never verbally acknowledged or shared with either of them.

I enjoyed parts of the book where Sienna shedded her naive disposition and showed her witty side. When she'd make certain remarks about what was going on and about the situation she was placed in. I liked her poetic take on things. I did not like her overall personality throughout the story. I felt like she was playing the victim the entire time. I have to say, I did like the twist. I was definitely not expecting the ending.

Sienna is a crazy, subconsciously manipulative, stalker. Caleb is oblivious and can't make up his mind. Sienna's friends are her enablers. Kadan just exists. Leslie, I like. 

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

The concept of the story seems to me to be: high school girl falls in love with boy she barely knows, let's watch her struggle to win or lose him. I see that a lot in Teen Fiction. There is not that much difference between your story and those, though you do have an interesting cast of characters. Your ending really threw me for one too. Very nice twist.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

You have a habit of showing, not telling. Telling the story through first person is confusing and makes it seem like the person whose point of view we're looking through has magical psychic powers which allows her to see and feel what other people are seeing and feeling. With a little bit of changing around words and re-ordering sentences, the flow of the story will improve.

ex: I looked at her. "Stop," she said, getting mad.

How do I know she's getting mad? How does the reader know why I know she's getting mad?

Potential suggestion: I looked at her. "Stop," she said, her voice clipped. Her hands slowly balled into tight fists and her left eye began to twitch.

Which one can you visualize better?

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️

Does it move me? No. The characters are flat, they react  predictably, and the story is cliche. I could relate to a couple of scenes, Sienna can be witty when she wants to, other than that the storyline needs a good polishing. Earlier chapters are a bit dull, I found my interest wavering in and out in certain scenes.

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Your grammar could use a little work. You are missing punctuations in a few places and dialogue tags are somewhat confusing. You should start a new line when a new speaker is speaking, this thwarts confusion. You have a couple of words that you've used wrong and some of your sentences are missing words entirely. You also have a knack for replacing 'you' with 'u' which is really distracting.

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

All of your words are different fonts. That stood out to me right away. It isn't necessarily a bad thing but it's not really a good thing either. Your font is also cut off on the top left and the bottom right. Remember the dimensions of wattpad covers are 1:6 or 256x400. Other than that, the design is simple. A boy and a girl smiling at eachother. They look like they're in love which reflects the story quite well.

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary was a backstory to the main characters. It shines a light on how easily Sienna falls into obsession and how it all began. The ending part of the summary gives us a little bit of what's to happen in the future.

Overall ⭐️⭐️/5

The book, Reaching For The Stars, is a Dramatical Teen Fiction written by romance1n. The book follows Aaliyah as she trudges through life with an abusive father and a dismissive mother with her only support system being her twin brother, Austin. She is just your average teenager going through the motions of high school when she's met with the new kid, a delinquent young man named Martinez that won't leave her be.

The story is written in first person, primarily through Aaliyah's perspective. Aaliyah is a quiet and reserved person who enjoys solitude. She does not like any physical contact, even if it is from her brother. She is also described as being distrustful of people. We know of her past and we know of her present but we want to find out about future. This character is believable and relatable, however, her actions seems to somewhat contradict what her personality is described as. She does not trust people but she readily 'abandons' her brother, someone she has a connection to by blood, to sit with someone she only just met hours ago. She does not like to be touched by others or to touch others but she helped her father, who had just beaten her, up and into bed-- kissing him on the forehead.

Martinez seems like your typical bad boy getting into trouble enough to be expelled from school. He claims his troubles stem from other's misunderstandings in him. He does not seem to be disrespectful in general but rather rebellious. He has no respect for authority figures (e.g. when he refused to shake the principal's hand when they first met) but has some semblance of morals as he helps Aaliyah when her books fell when they first met.

I like the subject matter being addressed. It is something I think needs more PSAs. Abuse is a huge thing -- and in situations like this, the 'system' never seems to know how to handle it, if they even bother to do it in the first place. It is too early in the book to be much of a judge on anything, but I do enjoy Austin and Aaliyah's close relationship. I am glad to read that she is not entirely alone. The story moves along in a somewhat fast pace, and sometimes gets a little confusing. The lunch scene is very confusing as I'm not sure where the extra people came from. Were they already sitting there? Did Martinez invite them or was it Austin that they were with? Why were they there?

I'd like to read more of this story but the characters need a little work. The lunch scene needs to be tweaked. I like Aaliyah but her personality is a little bit confusing.

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The concept of the story seems to me to be: high school drama. It is too early on in the story, in my opinion, to draw a true conclusion on originality.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Vision of the story is memorable, however it is very confusing at times. The chapters don't necessarily flow well. The introduction of characters don't seem to be too natural. They just suddenly appear in thin air without rhyme or reason. The lunch scene is very confusing, but other than that, it captures my attention well. 

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️  

Does it move me? Not really. It may just be too early in on the story, but the characters didn't really speak to me, other than Aaliyah. I understand Aaliyah but I do not know who Austin is besides her twin. I don't really know Martinez all that well (maybe pizza will help).

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

Your grammar could use a bit of work. Commas, commas, commas, commas, commas, commas! Commas are everyone's worst nightmare -- they are MY worst nightmare. Remember the old  saying "when in doubt, leave it out". You need to work a little bit on your word choices, sentence structures, and punctuations. Dialogue tags are also a good thing to read up on. Having too many can hurt a story just as much as not having enough.

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Simplicity is beauty. You cover stars the main character with an all blue filter -- The sky. The title is written in bold yellow letters -- The stars. It is simple yet beautiful and fitting for the title.

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary gives us a graphic and morbid glance into part of the life of Aaliyah. The part she wishes would end but wishes to hide from everyone, including her brother. The reason I rated this 3 was because the summary contained a few grammatical errors that actually make the summary confusing to read. You have commas in places were periods should be.

Overall ⭐️⭐️⭐️/5

The book, Secret Feelings, is a Romance story written by keshbentley. This story is written in first person. It is about a young woman named Kira who lives with her father. She has sworn off love completely because of past grievances. Her and her father are down on their luck, struggling to make ends meet. Kira's father, a laid off chef, and Kira, a waitress. Kira meets a mysterious patron who tips her generously. This generosity turns out to be somewhat of a rues as she is later kidnapped by the same person.

The main protagonist in the story is Kira. The story is written primarily from her perspective. She is a hardworking girl who wishes to do right by her father but ends up being dealt a bad hand from fate. She is described as nice and caring but can snap when irritated. The word Yandere rings strongly in my head when I read about her. Kira is a well rounded character, although I do get a little bit annoyed at her reactions to the situations she's placed in. She usually underreacts to things.

Dante is a little bit of an enigma. Little is known about him and what information is given isn't all too in-depth. I assume he will be the deuteragonist, but currently he is the antagonist as he is the one who has kidnapped Kira. As it is still early in the story, I assume this will soon be remedied.

What I like about the book is the quirky voice that Kira has. It is actually really enjoyable to read. I find her really hilarious. Did you notice that you censor words more when you're writing for Dante than when you're writing for Kira? I found that a bit ironic but funny. I find, though, that the errors are a little bit distracting. The lack of punctuations really take away from the story.

I did enjoy reading the book, however. It isn't a genre I normally read but I do find myself dabbling from time to time in the romance department. I really like Kira's voice. You need to work on fixing the punctuations and line breaks. Dante could use a little tweak too.

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The concept of the story seems to me to be: A mafiaesque love story with elements of stockholm syndrome. I kind of get the feel the entire story is just explaining the reason Kira is so stone-hearted, which isn't all too interesting. It may be a little too early to judge such a thing as originality on a story like this.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Vision of the story is memorable. The flow of the story gets a bit interrupted by nonsensical rantings of main protagonist from time to time but nothing too distracting. These little breaks are actually pretty funny and add the charm to the story. There were a few hiccups in the storyline and a few plot holes that need to be filled but this is still early on in the story, so it would be hard to judge if they are really holes or not. I could relate to some characters and envision some situations playing out in my mind's eye. 

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️  

Honestly, the story is kind of dull in a few places. My interest wavered in and out during some of scenes. The main protagonist's naivety can be somewhat of a turn off. She doesn't really react to the situation like you'd think someone would, given the circumstances.

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ 

You need a little work with punctuation. There were some areas in each chapter where punctuations were missing completely, making it a little difficult to actually understand what was happening. In some areas where there should have been periods, there were commas, and where there should have been commas or periods, there was a lack of anything. There were some points in the story where there was a random line break in the middle of a sentence. 

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The simplicity of the design speaks volumes. The boy and girl pressing their heads together in what one can assume is silence. Their eyes are closed, the girl is frowning -- we can assume this is Kira -- and the boy is smiling -- we can assume this is one of the mobsters. There is one thing though. In my opinion, the pink and yellow letters in the corner kind of throw the cover off. The coloring is wrong and the font face is wrong. 

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary, I assume, is a dialogue between one of the mobsters and Kira. It gives us a tiny bit of a glance at what happens in the future without giving away too much. It makes you want to actually read to find out why she said what she said and who she said it to.

Overall ⭐️⭐️⭐️/5

The book, A Fear In Love, is a Romantic Drama written by _legally_. It is about a young lady named Allison who is betrayed in the worst of ways by a family member. She is thrust into a downward spiral of depression and self-disgust after her uncle raped her and her father passed off the confession as her seeking attention. Blake, on the other hand, is the complete opposite of Allison in every way. They manage to be friends because Allison reminds Blake of his sister, whom he had lost to depression. The book is written completely in first person, primarily told through Allison. We are given a glimpse into her life from different perspectives from those around her: Nick, Blake, Julissa, Allyssa. We are also taken into their lives and how it comingles with the issues Allison is facing.

The main protagonist in the story is Allison. The book follows her in her rollercoaster of a life as she tries to cope with the ramifications of her uncle's actions and her father's initial inactions. Allison is a well rounded character with real world flaws. She is a blend of perfection and imperfection which makes her a character that can be relatable to; however, there could be more character development for her. As it stands, she is some what defined and characterized by her actions after the unfortunate event of her innocence being robbed from her.

Blake is your atypical, typical 'bad boy' who comes off as extremely standoffish. I see a bit of cliche in him. He is extremely disrespectful to authority, as seen from his interaction with his parents; he is none too caring about other people's feelings, as can be shown by his initial interactions with Allison. His caring nature is later revealed through his later interactions with Allison, technically making Blake the only dynamic character so far.

What I like about this book is that does give you a break from the depressing theme of betrayal. Throughout the story, there are times when humor shines through, giving the characters the much needed comic relief from the serious nature of the situation they're in. I found the therapist meeting rather interesting. Although I think it does a great deal to add to the storyline, "why" being a question a therapist asks constantly is a little troubling. "why" is probably the most difficult question anyone can answer, in my honest opinion, and for a therapist to constantly ask an obviously distressed patient this without pause, is not really sitting well with me. Though, it could happen. And this may be the reason she oust the idea of having therapy any more.

I enjoyed reading this book, even though it is kind of against the norm of what I usually read. I like the characters, I like their interaction with one another, I like how the story unravels itself slowly. What needs alittle work is the main character, Allison. She needs a little more depth. I definitely would recommend anyone to read this book.

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The concept of the story seems to me to be: Something bad happens to good girl, bad boy swoops in to help good girl. A concept somewhat overdone, especially on books on wattpad. Even with this in mind, the way this was carried out was in a more original way than I would have guessed. The summary suggest a typical badboy get goodgirl story, but we were given something much more beyond this concept.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

Vision of the story is memorable. The set up and delivery of the events in the story flow well, even though there are a couple of hiccups here and there. I could relate to some characters and envision some situations playing out in my mind's eye. There was a couple of confusion of place and time, sometimes forgetting where a character was last when the POV switches, however this is through no fault of yours.

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

Does it move me? Yes. Did I yell at the screen while reading it? Yes. The story was, indeed, engaging. This is why I rated it a 4. I did feel for the characters, I could relate to them, I could put myself in their shoes.

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

This is where it gets a tiny bit dicey. Your grammar could use a bit of work. Commas, commas, commas, commas, commas, commas! Your earlier chapters! COMMAS! Commas are everyone's worst nightmare -- they are MY worst nightmare. My old teacher used to always say "when in doubt, leave it out". You need to work a little bit on your word choices, sentence structures, and when to not use commas. Dialogue tags are also a good thing to read up on. Having too many can hurt a story just as much as not having enough.

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Your cover, in my honest opinion, really does reflect the book well. It is simple yet complex at the same time. A fear in love. Rose is symbolic for love, Blue is symbolic for fear. The blood is symbolic of pain which Allison has gone through with her uncle. The cover itself is symbolizes what the story is about.

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary gives us a little peek into who our main characters are. It is also the only place we get a glimpse of who Allison was before her troubles began. The summary gives an accurate representation of what will happen without telling us how it will and why it will happen. It gives us the assumption of one thing while we're slowly revealed more and more as the story unravels.

Overall ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️/5