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The book, The Ghost of Him, is a Teen Fiction written by loveinsolitude. The story is written in first person and follows a young lady named Sienna who chases an obsession. Her obsession is a person she's only seen once in passing and has never been formally introduced to before. Sienna is a senior in high school; a picture perfect student, daughter, and friend who is known by all. Caleb, on the other hand, is the complete opposite of her and no one really knows much about him.

The story is written in Sienna's point of view.  Based off the summary alone, I do not like Sienna. Her description is the epitome of a Mary-Su -- or a character that is perfection with no real-world flaws. She isn't really that relatable until we're introduced to her obsession, Caleb. This is where my dislike for her begins to grow. She is hypocritical. She keeps calling Caleb a jerk even though she keeps getting in his face after being told she was bothering him. Her reaction to him telling her off is to cry and then try again later. My dislike for her personality made it difficult to continue reading. She claims that she wants to give him everything and get nothing in return, however, she inadvertently demands his affection and attention.

Caleb, on the other hand, is completely oblivious to her obsession, even though everyone else around him can see it, save Juliet. I'd have to agree with Leslie on the rest of the 'friends' in the circle. They do seem to be loyal to a tooth to Sienna. To the point where they nearly shunned Juliet and Caleb in the lunchroom after their revelation. All over something the two couldn't control and something Sienna never verbally acknowledged or shared with either of them.

I enjoyed parts of the book where Sienna shedded her naive disposition and showed her witty side. When she'd make certain remarks about what was going on and about the situation she was placed in. I liked her poetic take on things. I did not like her overall personality throughout the story. I felt like she was playing the victim the entire time. I have to say, I did like the twist. I was definitely not expecting the ending.

Sienna is a crazy, subconsciously manipulative, stalker. Caleb is oblivious and can't make up his mind. Sienna's friends are her enablers. Kadan just exists. Leslie, I like. 

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

The concept of the story seems to me to be: high school girl falls in love with boy she barely knows, let's watch her struggle to win or lose him. I see that a lot in Teen Fiction. There is not that much difference between your story and those, though you do have an interesting cast of characters. Your ending really threw me for one too. Very nice twist.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

You have a habit of showing, not telling. Telling the story through first person is confusing and makes it seem like the person whose point of view we're looking through has magical psychic powers which allows her to see and feel what other people are seeing and feeling. With a little bit of changing around words and re-ordering sentences, the flow of the story will improve.

ex: I looked at her. "Stop," she said, getting mad.

How do I know she's getting mad? How does the reader know why I know she's getting mad?

Potential suggestion: I looked at her. "Stop," she said, her voice clipped. Her hands slowly balled into tight fists and her left eye began to twitch.

Which one can you visualize better?

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️

Does it move me? No. The characters are flat, they react  predictably, and the story is cliche. I could relate to a couple of scenes, Sienna can be witty when she wants to, other than that the storyline needs a good polishing. Earlier chapters are a bit dull, I found my interest wavering in and out in certain scenes.

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Your grammar could use a little work. You are missing punctuations in a few places and dialogue tags are somewhat confusing. You should start a new line when a new speaker is speaking, this thwarts confusion. You have a couple of words that you've used wrong and some of your sentences are missing words entirely. You also have a knack for replacing 'you' with 'u' which is really distracting.

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

All of your words are different fonts. That stood out to me right away. It isn't necessarily a bad thing but it's not really a good thing either. Your font is also cut off on the top left and the bottom right. Remember the dimensions of wattpad covers are 1:6 or 256x400. Other than that, the design is simple. A boy and a girl smiling at eachother. They look like they're in love which reflects the story quite well.

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary was a backstory to the main characters. It shines a light on how easily Sienna falls into obsession and how it all began. The ending part of the summary gives us a little bit of what's to happen in the future.

Overall ⭐️⭐️/5

The book, Secret Feelings, is a Romance story written by keshbentley. This story is written in first person. It is about a young woman named Kira who lives with her father. She has sworn off love completely because of past grievances. Her and her father are down on their luck, struggling to make ends meet. Kira's father, a laid off chef, and Kira, a waitress. Kira meets a mysterious patron who tips her generously. This generosity turns out to be somewhat of a rues as she is later kidnapped by the same person.

The main protagonist in the story is Kira. The story is written primarily from her perspective. She is a hardworking girl who wishes to do right by her father but ends up being dealt a bad hand from fate. She is described as nice and caring but can snap when irritated. The word Yandere rings strongly in my head when I read about her. Kira is a well rounded character, although I do get a little bit annoyed at her reactions to the situations she's placed in. She usually underreacts to things.

Dante is a little bit of an enigma. Little is known about him and what information is given isn't all too in-depth. I assume he will be the deuteragonist, but currently he is the antagonist as he is the one who has kidnapped Kira. As it is still early in the story, I assume this will soon be remedied.

What I like about the book is the quirky voice that Kira has. It is actually really enjoyable to read. I find her really hilarious. Did you notice that you censor words more when you're writing for Dante than when you're writing for Kira? I found that a bit ironic but funny. I find, though, that the errors are a little bit distracting. The lack of punctuations really take away from the story.

I did enjoy reading the book, however. It isn't a genre I normally read but I do find myself dabbling from time to time in the romance department. I really like Kira's voice. You need to work on fixing the punctuations and line breaks. Dante could use a little tweak too.

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The concept of the story seems to me to be: A mafiaesque love story with elements of stockholm syndrome. I kind of get the feel the entire story is just explaining the reason Kira is so stone-hearted, which isn't all too interesting. It may be a little too early to judge such a thing as originality on a story like this.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ 

Vision of the story is memorable. The flow of the story gets a bit interrupted by nonsensical rantings of main protagonist from time to time but nothing too distracting. These little breaks are actually pretty funny and add the charm to the story. There were a few hiccups in the storyline and a few plot holes that need to be filled but this is still early on in the story, so it would be hard to judge if they are really holes or not. I could relate to some characters and envision some situations playing out in my mind's eye. 

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️  

Honestly, the story is kind of dull in a few places. My interest wavered in and out during some of scenes. The main protagonist's naivety can be somewhat of a turn off. She doesn't really react to the situation like you'd think someone would, given the circumstances.

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ 

You need a little work with punctuation. There were some areas in each chapter where punctuations were missing completely, making it a little difficult to actually understand what was happening. In some areas where there should have been periods, there were commas, and where there should have been commas or periods, there was a lack of anything. There were some points in the story where there was a random line break in the middle of a sentence. 

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The simplicity of the design speaks volumes. The boy and girl pressing their heads together in what one can assume is silence. Their eyes are closed, the girl is frowning -- we can assume this is Kira -- and the boy is smiling -- we can assume this is one of the mobsters. There is one thing though. In my opinion, the pink and yellow letters in the corner kind of throw the cover off. The coloring is wrong and the font face is wrong. 

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary, I assume, is a dialogue between one of the mobsters and Kira. It gives us a tiny bit of a glance at what happens in the future without giving away too much. It makes you want to actually read to find out why she said what she said and who she said it to.

Overall ⭐️⭐️⭐️/5

The book, A Fear In Love, is a Romantic Drama written by _legally_. It is about a young lady named Allison who is betrayed in the worst of ways by a family member. She is thrust into a downward spiral of depression and self-disgust after her uncle raped her and her father passed off the confession as her seeking attention. Blake, on the other hand, is the complete opposite of Allison in every way. They manage to be friends because Allison reminds Blake of his sister, whom he had lost to depression. The book is written completely in first person, primarily told through Allison. We are given a glimpse into her life from different perspectives from those around her: Nick, Blake, Julissa, Allyssa. We are also taken into their lives and how it comingles with the issues Allison is facing.

The main protagonist in the story is Allison. The book follows her in her rollercoaster of a life as she tries to cope with the ramifications of her uncle's actions and her father's initial inactions. Allison is a well rounded character with real world flaws. She is a blend of perfection and imperfection which makes her a character that can be relatable to; however, there could be more character development for her. As it stands, she is some what defined and characterized by her actions after the unfortunate event of her innocence being robbed from her.

Blake is your atypical, typical 'bad boy' who comes off as extremely standoffish. I see a bit of cliche in him. He is extremely disrespectful to authority, as seen from his interaction with his parents; he is none too caring about other people's feelings, as can be shown by his initial interactions with Allison. His caring nature is later revealed through his later interactions with Allison, technically making Blake the only dynamic character so far.

What I like about this book is that does give you a break from the depressing theme of betrayal. Throughout the story, there are times when humor shines through, giving the characters the much needed comic relief from the serious nature of the situation they're in. I found the therapist meeting rather interesting. Although I think it does a great deal to add to the storyline, "why" being a question a therapist asks constantly is a little troubling. "why" is probably the most difficult question anyone can answer, in my honest opinion, and for a therapist to constantly ask an obviously distressed patient this without pause, is not really sitting well with me. Though, it could happen. And this may be the reason she oust the idea of having therapy any more.

I enjoyed reading this book, even though it is kind of against the norm of what I usually read. I like the characters, I like their interaction with one another, I like how the story unravels itself slowly. What needs alittle work is the main character, Allison. She needs a little more depth. I definitely would recommend anyone to read this book.

(Rating ⭐️/5)

Originality ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

The concept of the story seems to me to be: Something bad happens to good girl, bad boy swoops in to help good girl. A concept somewhat overdone, especially on books on wattpad. Even with this in mind, the way this was carried out was in a more original way than I would have guessed. The summary suggest a typical badboy get goodgirl story, but we were given something much more beyond this concept.

Vision ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

Vision of the story is memorable. The set up and delivery of the events in the story flow well, even though there are a couple of hiccups here and there. I could relate to some characters and envision some situations playing out in my mind's eye. There was a couple of confusion of place and time, sometimes forgetting where a character was last when the POV switches, however this is through no fault of yours.

Impact ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

Does it move me? Yes. Did I yell at the screen while reading it? Yes. The story was, indeed, engaging. This is why I rated it a 4. I did feel for the characters, I could relate to them, I could put myself in their shoes.

Technique ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

This is where it gets a tiny bit dicey. Your grammar could use a bit of work. Commas, commas, commas, commas, commas, commas! Your earlier chapters! COMMAS! Commas are everyone's worst nightmare -- they are MY worst nightmare. My old teacher used to always say "when in doubt, leave it out". You need to work a little bit on your word choices, sentence structures, and when to not use commas. Dialogue tags are also a good thing to read up on. Having too many can hurt a story just as much as not having enough.

Cover ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Your cover, in my honest opinion, really does reflect the book well. It is simple yet complex at the same time. A fear in love. Rose is symbolic for love, Blue is symbolic for fear. The blood is symbolic of pain which Allison has gone through with her uncle. The cover itself is symbolizes what the story is about.

Summary ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The summary gives us a little peek into who our main characters are. It is also the only place we get a glimpse of who Allison was before her troubles began. The summary gives an accurate representation of what will happen without telling us how it will and why it will happen. It gives us the assumption of one thing while we're slowly revealed more and more as the story unravels.

Overall ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️/5